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All right. Keep in mind that I have not played any Final Fantasy games (unless you count Mana).
Lead
There was a day-night cycle tied to the real-world time of day, and includes a social element - switches to present tense, and it is not said what the social element is included with.
whereby talking with a befriending certain characters - is that "a" supposed to be "and"? Or is one of "talking with" and "befriending" not supposed to be there?
The game, which acts as a companion to the original game, - is the original game Type-0, or does it refer to something else?
an alternate cycle of conflict - I don't know what this means.
The original protagonists - of Type-0? Or some other game?
the game had five hundred thousand registered users - is there a reason to not write it as "500,000"?
Gameplay
sets out on missions across Orience. - might be good to mention what Orience is here. I've already read the rest of the article, but if I hadn't I might have wondered if it was a town, a country, whatever.
but eventually is soon able to explore - I feel like "eventually" and "soon" aren't both needed - pick one.
Recurring creatures such as Moogles and Chocobos appear. - okay, so I recognize these names, but you might want to say that they're recurring creatures within the Final Fantasy series. Also, the sentence comes out of nowhere and ends very suddenly - Okay, so Moogles and Chocobos appear, but what are they, in what context do they appear? Maybe tie it together with the next sentence with a colon?
special control stick - Is this a virtual controller on the screen? Is there anything special about it, because that sounds like the standard way of doing "traditional" button controls on a touch screen.
The character's bedroom - "The player character's bedroom", or "The Cadet's bedroom".
The in-game time is also synchronized with real-world time. Like, if you play at night it's night in the game world? It's very sudden and doesn't really elaborate on how it works. Additionally, I don't think the word "also" is needed.
Successfully completing quests - "Successfully" seems unnecessary, unless it's possible for a quest to be marked as completed without the player succeeding at the task?
How does the job system work?
Setting and characters
Noticing that the Cadet is linked here, and not on their first mention.
Two other crucial characters - Not so sure that we should be calling something "crucial".
Plot
Explain that the game is split into phases before saying In the First Phase, - the reader doesn't necessarily know this yet.
What is Tempus Finis? My limited knowledge of Latin-based languages say it's the end of time, which seems to make sense, but please explain it.
What is a l'Cie?
Who is Cid?
The average English-speaker probably doesn't know what gaiden means.
Development
Explain who Tabata is, and link his name.
The average English-speaker probably doesn't know what TGS means - write out Tokyo Game Show, and link it.
What is the meaning of the "Chapter" in "Chapter (First Phase)"?
Is it necessary to write the platforms here? The game is only available on iOS and Android, so what other platforms could the release dates be referring to?
Post-release and legacy
The first hint of a localization appeared when the Agito trademark filed for European territories. When was this?
@IDV: I think I've attended to everything you pointed out. I also went through the gameplay section and did some present-to-past tense fixings, as this game is technically gone forever. --ProtoDrake (talk) 17:44, 8 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
--IDVtalk 23:58, 8 December 2015 (UTC)